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                      EDITING/CRITIQUE  SERVICES - 2016-2017

    I edit/critique adult and young adult fiction and non fiction only. No children's books.


The rate for editing a book manuscript, short story or article is based on the submitted material being double spaced, Times New Roman font and 12 pt. type. WORD DOCUMENTS ONLY.

Book Manuscript, Short Story, Article 

Editing service includes: in-line editing and a written evaluation of manuscript, short story or article. I use Word 2010 and the Track Changes function.

Rate: $3.00 per double-spaced page


The rate for critiquing a book manuscript, short story or article is based on the submitted material being double spaced, Times New Roman font and 12 pt. type.

Book Manuscript, Short Story, Article

No in-line editing is involved in a critique, although notes may be made in the body of the manuscript if deemed appropriate.

A critique includes a detailed written evaluation of the manuscript and suggestions for improvement.

Rate: 3.00 per double-spaced page


Editing Experience:

Twilight Time Books

Liquid Silver Books

Extasy Books       

"Carol Guy is an excellent editor with a wealth of writing experience and a keen eye for plot, characters and storyline.  She edited my two most recent books, and her suggestions made the finished product much better." Tim Smith, award-winning author of the new romantic comedy Anywhere the Heart Goes. 
"I am deeply grateful for Carol Guy's final editing of my book. Her expertise is invaluable."Jay D. Roberts MD, author of Break the Chains . 
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Adverbs - A Few Go A Long Way

Although adverbs are necessary, they are often overused. Adverbs modify verbs, adjectives and even other adverbs. For instance, walk is a verb. You could modify it by saying "He walked slowly down the street." Or, you could say, "He strolled down the street." The latter sounds better and you've gotten rid of the adverb.

 Using adverbs in dialogue tags can also be avoided. Instead of "Look out!" Joe said loudly, write, "Look out!" shouted Joe.

Adverbs can also weaken your narrative. Note the two examples below:

 Susan spoke quietly into the phone, hesitating frequently to listen for a response. There was a click and she realized the line was dead.

Susan whispered into the phone, listening frequently for a response. Suddenly the line went dead.

The second example has much more suspense and drama and that's what you want.


Here are some errors I find all the time when editing.

Affect and Effect

Affect is a verb. If you affect something, you change it or have an impact on it.

Effect is a noun. It is the result of something, e.g. a cause has an effect.

Example:  I didn't know it would affect you this way.

                Did that experience have a lasting effect?

Cite and Site

To cite is to name in a legal document

Site is a location

Farther and Further

Farther means distance

Further refers to time or quantity


Above and beyond the call of duty

Bigger fish to fry

Clear as mud

Down in the dumps

Every fiber of my being

Fit to be tied

Go the extra mile

Hit the ground running

In the final analysis

Pulling no punches

Two peas in a pod


Overuse of adjectives and adverbs - Using appropriate verbs can cut down on the need for adverbs and I covered that already. As for adjectives, use them wisely and don't piggy back them. For example instead of saying, She had bright, clear blue eyes, how about: She had vibrant blue eyes.

Tag lines with dialogue. If your dialogue is strong enough, you won't need tags that often. And if there are only two people in a scene, you should only used tags every so often, just to make sure the reader doesn't lose track of who is saying what.

Redundancy of thought. I find this a lot. The author will make a point, then in the same paragraph rephrase the same thought over and over. Say it once, then move on.